The Enduring Cosmos

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by ~*Dark_Light*~ (I just keep on posting!) on Wednesday, 18-Jul-2007 11:25:12

Flung first from womb
With the life sustaining umbilical cord
Attaching one the other
Severed and that one sharing of life
Becomes now the twain.

The twain they travel on life’s path way
Oft times sharing the same road
No one ever said that path would be smooth
For between the generations
Rocky sometimes at best is the trail

There comes that time in passing
When one of the twain is from mortality flung
When then is understood that an invisible
Life sustaining umbilical cord was there all along
And a severing a new comes in to be

No longer connected and yet greater the bond
For understanding more the connectedness
Of all life with that of Mother Earth
Then in turn Earth with all her neighboring planets
Swirling about in space within the enduring cosmos


~*Thunderous MidNight*~

Post 2 by blbobby (Ooo you're gona like this!) on Thursday, 19-Jul-2007 8:57:24

Well done, thanks.

Bob

p.s. You really should meet Connie/Grace if she ever comes back on the zone. You two have a similar writing style.

Post 3 by speedie (move over school!) on Friday, 20-Jul-2007 7:59:21

Fierce familiar all right bun nose hmm? lol

Stevie.

Post 4 by ~*Dark_Light*~ (I just keep on posting!) on Saturday, 21-Jul-2007 15:51:13

Bob it is and good to know you enjoyed your moments spent here,
As even now through space in this time we are making journey travel,
Within The Cosmos Enduring.
So I've heard this name dropping made mention

Hmm Stevie for yes fierce at times is the familiar feeling,
As within The Cosmos Enduring
We are given to experience all of life.
At times as though being flung in directions many,
Stretched and pulled out of place
Seeking once again to feel a connectedness.


~*Thunderous MidNight*~

Post 5 by gizmobear (move over school!) on Friday, 27-Jul-2007 12:19:05

Considering its oragin.
I would habve enjoyed a balanced approach, after all birthing, can be rough. The composition of the cosmos was and still is violent, dangerous, and unsettling.
I enjoyed the work overall and wish you continued success. gizzy

Post 6 by ~*Dark_Light*~ (I just keep on posting!) on Tuesday, 31-Jul-2007 22:31:46

Hey Gizzy,

Thanks for the comments.
I had really hoped that the wording was such to have made this writing as you put it, "unsettling."
To me the words like "flung" and "severed" are those words of being tossed about in an unsettling form and with severed liken as to being, ripped asunder.. Your comments give me to know to work on my word choice. Again, Thanks

~*Thunderous MidNight*~